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September 1, 2004

silent on the mantel

Filed under: pre-06-2006 — David Giacalone @ 1:59 pm










fiddle bow neg

 

grandpa’s fiddle

silent on the mantel

a cricket creaks

 

 

 

still on the bookshelf

the mother-in-law’s finger line

through the dust

 

 



(Brooks Books, 2000) 

 

 

from dagosan: 


ancient snapshot

their last smiles

for the camera

 

                         [Sept. 1, 2004]

 

 

 d ‘n’ a . . . twins nov51 small


one-breath pundit  






raising unconventional Kane

Filed under: pre-06-2006 — David Giacalone @ 12:23 pm


vote neg  With the convention going on in NYC, I’ve been checking madcap 

Madeleine Begun Kane’s News Haikus every day.   Of course, I’m still lobbying

to deregulate those ill-conceived, conventional haiku rules: haiku do not have to

be in 5-7-5 form with 17 syllables.  The best haiku in English usually contain 10

to 14 syllables, and contrast two images.  So, come on, Madeleine, loosen up! (I bet

she’s never heard that line before.)

 

I’d be in nudge heaven, if I could also get our popular cyber comic to popularize the

term senryu — “a short poem similar in structure to haiku but featuring ironic, humorous

and/or coarse observations on human nature [glossary].

 

You may recall that Mad honored ethicalEsq with a special stanza on car phoning,

about a year ago.  Here are two almost-haiku from dagosan to Madeleine: 

 


Mad’s still counting

five-seven-five

 





Republicans

and syllables —

fewer is better

 

[Sept. 1, 2004]                                                                                                                                                    eraser

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